tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post94542410022453793..comments2023-04-01T06:43:12.972-07:00Comments on Wamblings: Dust Fairies Take TwoWamblingshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10050308448434550026noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-25299024234428212532008-02-18T05:23:00.000-08:002008-02-18T05:23:00.000-08:00Jen, *hugs* Silly! Yes, in a way it is my baby. ...Jen, *hugs* Silly! Yes, in a way it is my baby. But I can't be overly thin skinned about it. I am trying to learn *growls at "e" key which is sticking*, trying to grow in my craft. I also feel the first one more deeply but can't discount the recommendations of my editor friend. I know I don't know squat about the short story genera. Personally I prefer 1000 page epics.Wamblingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10050308448434550026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-25174465002331753692008-02-16T16:19:00.000-08:002008-02-16T16:19:00.000-08:00Whew, hard to offer up advice about your work - it...Whew, hard to offer up advice about your work - it's like criticizing (sp) someones kid. Egg shell city! You didn't cuss me out so I am relieved! I am not sure about 'style' (I lack style in every area of my life!) I am talking 'voice'. You were more into the first one. Good luck honey. I envy your abilities! I'll read whatever you share and I will not be hurt if you add the post script "everyone but Jen, tell me what you think".... :) Have a relaxing weekend. Jenniferjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547226679311827501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-69545490326038540402008-02-16T11:47:00.000-08:002008-02-16T11:47:00.000-08:00Jen, I'm still really struggling to find my style....Jen, I'm still really struggling to find my style. When it comes to poetry, I know my style. Succinct, almost terse. Prose is harder though. I guess I need to go back and try to strike a balance between the two beginnings. I like the scene with the boys in the car. I think they echo their mother's insecurities.Wamblingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10050308448434550026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-80794386459507195362008-02-16T11:43:00.000-08:002008-02-16T11:43:00.000-08:00Marsha,My friend at the other blog pulled a Reggie...Marsha,<BR/><BR/>My friend at the other blog pulled a Reggie on me. *<I>grins</I>* I see what she is writing but I think it isn't my style. I don't know what I'm going to do with the story. I should be working on it today and instead I'm nursing a chocolate hangover. Gahhhhhh, you'd think I'd learn. One bite - OK, two bites - chancy, three bites - trouble.Wamblingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10050308448434550026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-60786062582916253932008-02-15T18:34:00.000-08:002008-02-15T18:34:00.000-08:00Oh Wamblings. What do I know? I like the beginni...Oh Wamblings. What do I know? I like the beginning of the first story. I was drawn in much quicker and the story was more straight to the point. The imagery of the pipe smoke was clearer. <BR/>In this post, I like the converstion with her sons, the question posed from a child's heart 'why me? why am I unlovable?' I believe any kid that has been forsaken would feel vulnerable this way and you wrote it well. The exchange between brothers was touching. I did not realize on the first reading that she knew she had a twin. That changes how the story will flow. There is much commotion around here (this may have had an influence on my opinion). I will re-read again tomorrow. You really are a good writer. You come across confident in your story. Be true to how you see the story forming! It will make more sense to everyone if you write it for YOU. Jenniferjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547226679311827501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-23792740930061356142008-02-15T09:25:00.000-08:002008-02-15T09:25:00.000-08:00I think you've shown quite well here. I like it.I think you've shown quite well here. I like it.Marshahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05271341261842592936noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3589104722041451840.post-27084819053381918542008-02-14T19:29:00.000-08:002008-02-14T19:29:00.000-08:00I am coming back tomorrow to read when I have plen...I am coming back tomorrow to read when I have plenty of time. I just wanted to wish you a Happy Valentine's Day. Jenniferjhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08547226679311827501noreply@blogger.com